I waited for her to finish using the restroom because even though she has been physically hurt she is still have this unbelievable habit of getting up early right before mom and I. I came from a poor family which seems to me as a curse. My mom is the type of person that most people would describe as fearless, possessing incredible strengths. She does jobs that some men wouldn’t dare to do. My younger sister Maggie has become this miserable person after the incident that had occurred in the other house a decade ago. She is mumbling to herself about this incident have destroyed her life for good which I don’t really consider true. In fact, the incident that occurred was an excitement for me because I hated every corner about our old house. Now the house that we are living in isn’t any better: scratches on the wall and holes on them as windows. I always dreamed of leaving this horrible house to much nicer one and feel like I belong in that life style.
My so long dream came true when I met him.
On a Monday afternoon, I met Asalamalakim, the son of the richest man of the whole town. He was this short looking guy with long hair all over his head. To me God had provided everything for their family. This was the ideal family I wished to came from or to be part of. He was a bit older than I was but I didn’t mind. I thought to myself that if I could be a part of this family, it could bring an end to my miserable life. I decided to start a relationship with him so I could be part of his luxury. I have always been a great looking girl and so making myself noticed by him would be the easier part of the plan. I didn’t tell my mom about what I was about to accomplish because she would pull out her annoying lessons of life how we shouldn’t take advantage of people for their wealth but what did I cared.
Dear Issaka,
I am impressed by how you shorten the story of “Everyday Use” by Alice Walker in a very compelling way. It really shows how Dee sees the family in someway and I like how you emphasize how poverty is the main problem of the family division, especially in the case of Dee. It is also impressive how you talk about the efforts that the Mother has done for her, which most of the people do not see from the side you saw it.
One of the lines that stand out for me were ” My dream became so true when I met him”, this explains how Dee did not want to continue living the type of life that she was going trough. This actually tells how she was not content how she lived with the mother and her sister and wanted to live another type of life outside of her box.
It actually connects to my life because most of the people want to get rid off poverty since they seem that this is one of the ways in which they want to get rid of poverty . this actually reminds me of why many people regardless of the stability of the family in which they live, they still want to break down relationships that even if they do no`t have the most money, they still leave happy. On top of that some people because of their lack of understanding and ambitions that reach more that what they actually can.
Thanks for allowing me to read your poem. I really like your point of view you left explain so much further than what we read so far in the story of “Everyday Use” by Alice Walker
Dear Issaka,
I am amazed by your story “Dee story to become” the way you characterized Dee shows that she will do anything to get what she wants even if it meant taking advantage of other people wealth. You mentioned something really powerful in your story that it touched me and I think It something that need to be taking in consideration as a life lesson.
The line is “we shouldn’t take advantage of people for their wealth”. This is the section that I think it now day girls some take really seriously that they will have a bright future.
Thanks for your Story. I look forward to seeing what’s coming up next.
Dear Issaka
I am interested with your short story, “Dee’s plan to become rich,” because related the ambitious that one girl wants to change her status of life doesn’t matter the obstacles or sacrifices.
One of the lines that stands out for me was, “This was the ideal family I wished to came from or to be part of. He was a bit older than I was but I didn’t mind. I thought to myself that if I could be a part of this family, it could bring an end to my miserable life. ” These lines represent that she is an ambitious person because she wants to have a better life that she has.
Your short story “Dee’s plan to become rich,” helps me understand that some people are ambitious and choose the easy way to change their life without thinking .
Thanks for your short story. I look forward to seeing what you make next. I hope you post interesting texts like this one.
Dear Issaka.
I am choosing an adjective showing emotion of enriched about your story. your story, “Dee’s plan to become rich” because you is teach us how women can be determined at the same ambitieuse. In an interest to succeed her life and for her family.
One line that stands out for me is,“This was the ideal family I wished to came from or to be part of” I think this line is thought-provoking because it caught my attention to know more about the story. Since I was asking myself many questions about her that was where is love because she just think about her profit when the man will be married her.
Another line that stands out for me is, “ I have always been a great looking girl and so making myself noticed by him would be the easier part of the plan.” I think this line is interesting because it makes me think how became a rich girl was her dream. Does why she just feel happy inside of her because she is thinking the situation will be easy for her since she has all the tools man need to see from women.
Your Story helps me to understand a story that I once read on everyday use because in this story it was a problem of a families that one sister was burned and others one no . Then sister who doesn’t burn she just acts differently because she think the family is not deserve here. Does why all things she doing is like rich daughter. Therefore your history just open eyes for me to understand more clearly.
Thanks for your Story I look forward to seeing what you make next time . Since I would like to see different type of story in others situation like that . Then using some of strategies elements that we can feel it more. And those can of thing will bring me back to see others creations you made.
Dear Issaka
I am enthusiastic about your short story, “Dee’s plan to become a rich,” because the way you depict Dee’s motives which really emphasized she knows how to play around people by only caring about her desires and gain what she craves for. She did not feel melancholy, even for a little bit when the old house god burned in the flames and her strong mom was breaking her back to manage household.
One line that stands out for me is, “ we shouldn’t take advantage of people for their wealth, ” I think this line is intriguing because this is authentic which makes your story excellent and teach a great lesson
Your story helps me to understand Everyday use that I once read, we should be satisfied with what we have by giving important heritage and tradition.
Thanks for your Story. I look forward to seeing what you make next.