I am a single Black women who raised my two daughters by hard work as a man on the field all day, breaking ice to get water for washing doing the best so Maggie and Dee can be proud of me. I wish to be recompensed for all the obstacles that I have overcome so my family can have enough to eat and wear.

One of the most traumatic situations occurred to Maggie. Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes. This heartbreak event makes her to be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance in society. She prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands. The man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house’s duty and taking care of the children.

Dee is totally different she wanted nice things like, a yellow, organdy dress to wear to her graduation from high school. At sixteen she had a style of her own -and knew what style was. She is more opened. She wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage without knowing or appreciating the origin of her race how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now.

I only had the opportunity to be slave who has sold like an object without any value. I got up early every single day to work in the cotton fields with the sun rays burning my skin. Now I am happy that this torment ended and finally I can enjoy my old and memorable house. Where only Maggie know the significant of all these walls, how our family fought to keep the house alive.

Now, I want to send my two only daughter outside to the society I know is going to be painful for Maggie having these scars in her skin but she as to be a strong woman who believe in herself more than other people’s opinion. Dee I know that after finishing your education is going to be enough time, so you had learned the real value of life.

After all, I am going to be proud I believe that one day both of you are going to be a change for the country creating equality.

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  1. Cory 8 months ago

    Dear Emely,
    you show a lot of feeling and really express your struggles and you show how determined you are to your kids. I have no idea what its like to be a mother so i cant speak on the idea of you raising 2 kids and being a single mother. so many good things will come to maggies way because shes being given so many good examples by you.
    – Cory Escobar

  2. Denieris 9 months ago

    This storie is the best because it shows the struggle of a mother who wants to give the best of her for her daughters as wll as it shows ho differents are the daughters in every point of view .

  3. Denieris 9 months ago

    This storie is the best because it shows the struggle of a mother who wants to give the best of her for her daughters

  4. Idelkys 9 months ago

    Dear Emely,

    I am very astonished by your story “Mom’s Obligation”. I really like your story because you get to show the piety from the Mother, the sacrifices that she did in order to race their children and the time that she dedicates in order to race them , and the way behind of how you describe every single moment happening in the family.

    Furthermore, one of the reasons why I like this story attracts me is because of how you eventually put yourself in the side of Maggie and Dee and describe each in their ways of being throughout the story. It eventually describes the sacrifices of the Mother.
    Moreover, another things that has attracted me and made me become attracted by your story is how put Maggie as the main focus of the story. The Mother is really congratulating Maggie for having understood her and besides mother was understood by Maggie and Maggie was understood by the mother as well. You letter inspires me because it can show that at the end they both understand to each other and it is what matters the most.
    Finally, the story of Mom’s obligation makes me feel very inspired and attracted because of how you put the Mother as the confessor of the behavior of her two daughters. I look forward to hearing more of your stories and share it with you and on to other people because they are very thoughtful. I hope you have a very good rest of the weekend.

    Best Regards,
    Idelkys Checo

  5. Fatema 9 months ago

    Dear Emely,

    I am very inspired by your short story, “Mom Obligation ,” because this story show that how strong a women can be. in this story mom had to do lot of hard work to raise her two daughter. she didn’t think about herself. she want to make her two daughter happy and she took all the hard time to herself.

    One line ,” I am a single Black women who raised my two daughters by hard work as a man on the field all day, breaking ice to get water for washing doing the best so Maggie and Dee can be proud of me,” that stands out for me because this shows that the women can do anything. and hard life make us learn lot of thing and make us strong.

    Your story helps me to understand, “Everyday use” story more clearly and mama’s personality and what she did for her daughter.

    Thanks for your story ” Everyday use” I look forward to seeing what you make next.

  6. Eros 9 months ago

    Dear Emely:
    I am very surprised with you story “Mom Obligation” , because of the choice that you made to describe a story like “ Everyday Use” that is already complicated but putting your point of view makes it such as understandable piece of writing that is analyzed in the best way to make it as clear as you could be able to put not just details of the story but to proof a piece of yourself as a writer in to an already established and developed almost a new story with the sense of the importance of family involvement. One of the most impacted pieces stated on your story that stands out to me is when you said, “One of the most traumatic situations occurred to Maggie. Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes”. I think this line resemble how you got into the character’s shoes,because the way that you are able to describe what is happening to the character in a deeper way than what we could read shows a lot of emotions and connections to the story as a whole this creates a sense of satisfaction in the reader when a writer is able to make the deep of a description, imagination,and tone . Another quote that stands out for me is “She wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage without knowing or appreciating the origin of her race how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now.” I think this expresses the desire of the main character of proving the doubters wrong while fighting for her dreams because she has been to the struggle and now she wants to stand out to show the best version of herself. Your story help me to understand the original version in a deeper way because of the imagination and tone that almost open the bridge for me to transfer inside of the story and see what is happening with the character like if i was an additional character of “ Everyday Use”.
    Thanks for your story. I look forward to seeing what you make next. What would bring me back to read any of your story is the appreciation to the detail and the attachment to keeping the main pieces of the original version without banishing the purpose or lesson of the actual story.

  7. Ahmed 9 months ago

    Dear Emely
    I appreciate you that you focus in Mama struggles in her life, You did a great job, most of us were focusing in Maggie and her sister, while the main character who faced a lot of issues wad the Mama. You just change our opinion about Mama, while we were thinking that she wasn’t fair with treating her daughters. However now we know by your writing that Mama had very difficult life where she had to being fair in the position that being fair is not the most important. Mama was trying always to be fair but she always had other things to do in order to gain the satisfaction of her daughters in a difficult stage of life. Thanks again Emely you did great.

  8. El-Hassn 10 months ago

    Dear Emely Lopez:

    I am astonished by your short story, “Mom Obligation” because it reinforces the cruel environment of living as an African American at this time. It also shows the power of education and how it could change minds.

    One set of lines that stands out for me is, “I only had the opportunity to be a slave who has sold like an object without any value. I got up early every single day to work in the cotton fields with the sun rays burning my skin.” I think these lines are very thoughtful because it shows that the mother knows the true power of education despite the fact that she wasn’t able to get an education because she didn’t have a choice.

    Another paragraph that stands out for me is, “After all, I am going to be proud I believe that one day both of you are going to be a change for the country creating equality.” I think this section is> intense because it shows that the mother really believes and depends on her daughters to change the world that she wasn’t able to change by herself.

    Your story helps me to understand “Everyday Use” that I once read. It talks about a girl called Maggie who feels she is better than her sister because she is highly educated. I think that we don’t get equal chances in life, so we can’t say that someone is better than others.

    Thanks for your story. I look forward to seeing what you make next. Your way of writing is very emotional and realistic. I hope to see you writing more stories that are history-related and non-fiction.

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