Dear Youth Voices Community,

Hello, my name is Christy-Lynn Lagula. I am 16 years old and I am an 11th grader at Fremont High School. I am currently doing a junior research project on the Foster care system. So far I feel like I’m being successful with finding reliable statistics.

This is my current thesis statement about the Foster care system: The current foster care system does not provide adequate support to foster children exiting the system that would allow them to have a successful future.

In order for my thesis to be considered proficient, I have to have a focused and debatable statement about a social inequity issue. My thesis will help guide how I read my sources and conduct my field research. I would greatly appreciate your feedback and help on my thesis statement as it is written so far.

Sincerely,

Christy-lynn Lagula

Fremont High School

Architecture & Design Academy

Class of 2019

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  1. Theresa Aguilar 3 months ago

    Hi Cristy

    How did your essay turn out?

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