i am white

i look like a bike

i lied, but i am white

when you see me, you’ll be amazed

i swam all the way here

more like i floated

but who cares

i’m amazing

my one dream is to fly

but that won’t happen

at least i can dream about it

but i am one hell of a swimmer

i have shield on my back

but no stars or stripes

ive been in the mouth of a bird

thats like my uber

my name is ice because im white like dice

no legs ,no feet

but ive been more places than you

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CC BY-SA 4.0 who am i by Tasean is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-ShareAlike 4.0 International License.

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  1. Anthony 2 years ago

    Dear Tasean your poem is “interesting”.As a animal lover i like the fact that you made poem about jellyfish.

  2. Matthew 2 years ago

    its ok. it talks about the real identity and the fake identity. its ok

  3. Leslye 2 years ago

    i like how you made it tricky to understand who you are and it was a bit funny too

  4. Elliot 2 years ago

    I really enjoyed reading reading your poem. My favorite line was when you said ” i am white”. Are you actually white? If not do you aspire to be white?

  5. Bella 2 years ago

    Although you have a unique writing style, I think that you had a fascinating message behind the poem. Some people may not really understand what you’re trying to say. Even though I don’t really understand it, you should be proud of your work because I think you used an interesting choice of words. A different idea every few stanzas leaving mystery ‘at least i can dream about it, but i am one hell of a swimmer’ was very interesting because it was the same topic but seemed random. Maybe next time you can make your voice more clear. COOL COOL

  6. Gonzalo 2 years ago

    I liked this poem a lot!! It says lots of real things that if you think will happen, it don’t… #1 I LIKED SO MUCH 🙂 :'(

  7. Juan Manuel 2 years ago

    I really liked your poem! The style is pretty good.

  8. marren Silcox 2 years ago

    This poem is so cool! It made me smile a good five times while reading it! I love the style of writing you incorporated in your prom. I also really liked having to solve this mystery to find out who you are in your writing.

  9. Zachary 2 years ago

    You have a good idea and interesting way of putting it but work on your diction.

  10. Ciara 2 years ago

    This is an interesting poem. The writing style is.. unique.

  11. Miguel 2 years ago

    I think this is a pretty cool idea to write about and I think you are close to what you really want to say. I would recommend using words that have more meaning to them, words that are more descriptive.

  12. Katelyn 2 years ago

    This is an interesting style as it lacks the common form of punctuation and syntax that is omnipresent in prose. At first I thought that you were speaking of yourself but looking at your picture I’m assuming that this poem is in reference to jelly fish. The only thing that I would suggest is that you add more images through vivid word usage.

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