Dear Youth Voices Community,
My name is San Ly, a senior of Fremont High School.
This is my current thesis statement:
To prevent the growing of mass incarceration in the United States, the government should give convicts more opportunities to interact with the outside world by gradually releasing nonviolent prisoners out who have served at least 5 years with promising modification from jails.
Fremont High School seniors are now writing preliminary thesis statements to help guide how they read their sources. I would greatly appreciate your feedback and help on my preliminary thesis statement.
San Ly
Fremont High School

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